1)enrich body paragraph
-explain outcomes of the two different people in Brandt’s passage. add more analysis
-talk more about how sponsors determine the trait of the story and explain how someone move between identities in the narratives
2)Introduction
-state my questions besides just writing about my claim
-make a comparison between a sponsor and the apprentice/master relationship and the apprentice/master relationship
3)Local (grammar, spelling, error patterns)
-add page number
